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[i luv tamas!!!!!!]

 *fictonial story*

Lita Conncheta Anzeotti!
 Don't go near the war zones now! You hear me? 
Yes mama!
 Now you take Morri along with you!
 Lita's mom pushed forward a skinny little girl sucking on her thumb with blue robes on.  Aww mama!
  Shes too slow!  She will never keep up to me!
 Stop! I have made up my mind.  Do not argue with your elders!

Ok mama.  She took Morri's hand and they walked outside and up the dirt road.


Do yall like it?

[Elana]

I don't think it's quite finished yet?

It's got a beginning, but no middle, and no end?

[acidiica]

I don't think it's quite finished yet?

It's got a beginning, but no middle, and no end?

I don't think it's quite done yet. I think she's going to post as it goes along.

The only suggestion I would give you is to use quotation marks when they speak, cos it can get very confusing... Sounds like it could get interesting though. When I read Morri though I instantly thought of my MoriNo 

[Kokuma]

Heh, my cousins have a cat named Morri who was first thought to be a boy but then she got babies...hehe.

Very good start of a story, very good. Next you should bring the dialogue to direction that explains the main characters a little bit.

Why is the topic named "Transformers"? I don't see relation between Transformers and this short-story o_O

[i luv tamas!!!!!!]

youll see. you just have to wait a bit.  Soon enough it will come